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Post by Beebs on Mar 21, 2008 14:57:50 GMT -6
xDD Hehe. ^^; I thought it was about time.
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Post by Liamane on Mar 21, 2008 15:04:56 GMT -6
XDDD Yeah, but now, Vincent and Miyo will do such a thousand times harder!! XDDD
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Post by Beebs on Mar 22, 2008 2:33:57 GMT -6
Nevah! xDDD Well, my next post could possibly be about the morning after. ;3
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Post by Liamane on Mar 22, 2008 12:10:02 GMT -6
XDDD Ohoho! I see how it is then. Well, when the time comes, it'll hurt the next morning for Miyo and Vincent. XDDDD
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Post by Sarcasmic Canadian on Apr 14, 2008 19:29:50 GMT -6
Well... time to invite myself to this party....
*pulls out a 6 pack* Expect a professional review after this.... *belch*
Ok, BB got me hooked to Season 1... very early in. But, It's not the story that you can read and then ignore for 2 weeks.... there's a lot going on at once...
The story almost died for me with the necklace plot.
Predictable, cliched, and everything else that is bad.
However, you managed to keep it alive.
ANd WTF happened to destryoing it?
Arina also, did not do it for me. She seemed thought out at first, but she changed really fast, really often in my mind.
ANd the Aeon thing? WTF mate? I know next to nothing about FF, but I seriously think that was majorly wacked and out of place.
But seriously, I love this fanfic.
3 peoples writing it is an awesome idea.... and it shows.
I love Kohana, but my favourite character has to be Kikyo or Jiro. I love Kikyo's character, and Jiro is the sarcastic one, so how can I not love him?
One final thing, Never ever do that death, come back to life bit again. NEVER! I hate that crap.
SO, it started off slow, begun to build up... but near the end it became like Season 2 of Heroes, acceptable, but could of been so much better.
Still love Season 1, I'll get around to Season 2... probably this weekend. {DON'T PULL A HEROES ON ME} XXD
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Post by Beebs on Apr 15, 2008 10:38:09 GMT -6
xDDD Well, I'm glad you liked some of it.  Thanks for the constructive comments though; I agree with most of them. The final version on the site will correct the plot errors and add some little details, but the main story will still remain intact, so you don't need to worry about re-reading it unless you want to. And I think Season 2 is loads better than Season 1 at this point; it started off a little slow, but it's starting to get pretty good on the later pages. Also, I just posted, but I want to post again after, so wait for me Lia. xDD |
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Post by Liamane on Apr 16, 2008 20:21:31 GMT -6
XDDD POOOSTED! *ring ring* Heh heh, I began posting the revised version of Season One on the forum. There's actually more on the official site, so check that out! I also added a Kikyo bio for you, SC. ;D
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Post by Sarcasmic Canadian on Apr 16, 2008 20:57:30 GMT -6
I'm going to check.
Love the Bio
But complaint time.
WTF is Jiro's? You need Jiro, him andf Kikyo are like a... package deal... and if you change that, so help me god, I will boycott this fanfic!
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Post by Liamane on Apr 17, 2008 7:13:29 GMT -6
XDDD I will, but he's yet to actually be revealed, going by the site's chapters. But, I suppose I'll get started on him them. To be honest Sarcasmic, from what BB and I have planned, Jiro is going to be totally bad ass. XDDD
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Post by Sarcasmic Canadian on Apr 22, 2008 16:33:52 GMT -6
I want them to feel pain. I want them to suffer. ((I want them to die of AIDS. xDD)) Vincent won't be able to turn me down any longer and I'll have control over him."
Best lines ever XDD
2 pages in Season 2.
Seriously
I can't stand Kohana, Miyo, or Vincent in Season 2. Repetition galore. Naomi sucks, and I'm not too fond of Axel, but at least he has some... unknowningness to him.
Jiro is still awesome and Tidus is getting up there but you need more Kikyo. She's just not doing it for me.
Rian is pretty sweet. I like Skye.... the evil bitch is always awesome.
ANd I totally ship Jikyo and Vikye.... Vincent and Skye would add some spice to the story.
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Post by Liamane on Apr 22, 2008 16:37:35 GMT -6
XDDD Oho, I think you'll like the next few pages!
The first few pages are extremely dry, imo, and Vincent won't really redeem himself until later. Skye is going to display total psycho bitch later on, so look forward to that. XDD Kohana is going to do major maturing and such, and without a doubt, Rian will prove to be very... well, you'll see. XDDD I have to say, if you like Rian now, you're going to LOVE him later. XDDD
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Post by Beebs on Apr 22, 2008 16:43:34 GMT -6
Naomi sucking...not my fault. xDD Those two biotches that co-write the story kept snubbing me when I tried to bring in my characters. xDDD I kid, I kid...kind of. But both Naomi & Tidus get much better in the upcoming pages. I think we need to come up with official shipping names too! xDD Vincent/Miyo = Viyo, maybe Vinyo? Jiro/Kikyo = Jikyo (ty Sarcasmic!) Naomi/Tidus = Naodus or Tiomi Vincent/Skye = Vikye or Skycent Any more...? |
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Post by Liamane on Apr 22, 2008 16:51:47 GMT -6
I agree. Tidus proves to be a much stronger character later on, and for some strange reason, I'm starting to really like Naomi. And, hey, don't blame me for the Naomi sucking! XDD If it was up to me, she was have already been the magen form of Rambo. XDDD Jk jk. I joke.
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Post by Sarcasmic Canadian on Apr 22, 2008 19:48:02 GMT -6
Vinyo for sure.
Jikyo for sure
not sure for Naomi/Tidus
and how can we forget.... Jidus.... I mean there's got to be Yaoi couple in this! XDD
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Post by Sarcasmic Canadian on Apr 22, 2008 21:18:00 GMT -6
Ok, I'm gonna review page by page.
Great improvement.
and i got my Vikye!
Bad thing: One month in two bloody posts? WTTF?
Good thing: More Jiro and Kikyo, Kohana clamed down, new plot, New dude... I'm looknig forward ot reading more.
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Post by Beebs on Apr 22, 2008 23:37:16 GMT -6
I know, I hated the time skip too. >.> And I just like...quadruple posted! xDD
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Post by Sarcasmic Canadian on May 3, 2008 0:45:12 GMT -6
OK Page 4 done took me forever to start reading again, sorry. I wanna know who the new guy is, I enjoyed the bit we get on Axel, and you know, i almost like the Group more without Vincent. But of course, all good things come to an end Anyhow, I dunno if I'll read page 5 tonight, or this weekend, so.... keep up the good work. |
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Post by Beebs on May 3, 2008 9:46:42 GMT -6
Well...glad you liked...I think! xDD Um...what's going on in page 4 again? |
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Post by Sarcasmic Canadian on May 3, 2008 13:24:05 GMT -6
Done Page 5
Skye/Vince is just reminding me of Miyop/Vince now... where's the sex slavery? You guys are evil!
The academy is interesting.... don't like the head master though.
Your council dudes remind of the company from Heroes.... and we all know what a diaster season 2 was .
Keep it up... I still like it
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Post by Beebs on May 3, 2008 16:43:06 GMT -6
Well, the headmaster has only been in like...5 posts, so how can you decide if you like him or not? xDD And I don't think the hooded people are like the Company...more like Organization XII, I'd say. xP
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Thanks for the constructive comments though; I agree with most of them. The final version on the site will correct the plot errors and add some little details, but the main story will still remain intact, so you don't need to worry about re-reading it unless you want to. And I think Season 2 is loads better than Season 1 at this point; it started off a little slow, but it's starting to get pretty good on the later pages.